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Hate is a fiery burning passion
That takes control and doesn’t ration
The anger that is inside
It makes it difficult to confide
About the tears that are hidden behind my eyes
The ones that are filled with anger, and lies
Hate is an abandoned feeling
That just happens to be so damn appealing
It lures me in
To leave never again
Hate clouds my eyes with blackness
Leaving my life in constant mess
Never to be cleaned
It’s a troublesome fiend
not done yet but still critiuque harsly!!
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falsehero7 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2009
Very nice I like it. I don't see any problems with it.
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A-m-o-u-r Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2008
It's really good! The one thing I would change is the line "It makes it difficult to confide." I would say "That makes it difficult to confide," or maybe just "Makes it difficult to confide."
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